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Attack

Elaborately winding words
Twisting like ribbons
Pierce like daggers
The flesh around throats

Cutting out all of the truths
Spewing from the once opened lips
Marring the beautiful flesh
With horrendous lies

With burns of hatred
Encircling wrists
And wicked teeth snapping
At every movement

Twisted tongues accuse
And cruel words bite
Into the faith
And rip it apart

Watching
With sick fascination
All their enemies
Crumple beneath their feet
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Author's Comments

Ummm, yeah.

I found this in my notebook and edited it to fit what I wanted. If you want I can post the original. I kinda wanted it to be more general because in the original it kept saying 'she' and I think I do that too much so I changed it!

If I had to pick a tone for this it would be accusatory and a mood would be anger.

The picture doesn't really go with the poem but its pretty! I have alot of pictures on my computer for different poems. I should probably inform you that none of them are mine.

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Lovely poem! I like it, it's soft and intense at the same time. Not to long and the point gets across, great job!

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Thank you very much! :lmao: It was originally kinda short and too bunched together so I fixed it!

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And so the one-sided obsessive stalker lion fell in love with the equally one-sided and poorly developed lamb.
That sounds about right.

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Well, it flows great now!

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Liquor in the front, poker in the rear.
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Thank you, that's what I was aiming for!

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And so the one-sided obsessive stalker lion fell in love with the equally one-sided and poorly developed lamb.
That sounds about right.

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well written :D

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Thank you. :D

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And so the one-sided obsessive stalker lion fell in love with the equally one-sided and poorly developed lamb.
That sounds about right.

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yw

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TripleSixTripleQTripleSix is running the ~WLiiAClub

What's your philosophy on life? "It's rubbish without cookies and sugar" - *ChibiSnoo
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Lol, thanks for the fav.

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And so the one-sided obsessive stalker lion fell in love with the equally one-sided and poorly developed lamb.
That sounds about right.

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no probs

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TripleSixTripleQTripleSix is running the ~WLiiAClub

What's your philosophy on life? "It's rubbish without cookies and sugar" - *ChibiSnoo

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